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Friday, July 2, 2010

Last night, I felt I was finally free.. free my own illusions. My friends know me. If I was hurt I'll just say "OVERNIGHT LANG TO", but they're wrong. Last night I just realized that I just wasted my time expecting for nothing. Last night, I also wrote a... I think a poem? because most often I just wrote quotations and i think it was hilarious. I entitled it as senses.

SENSES

When i first saw you
i knew that i won't forget you
my senses are too busy
busy, chasing for you

When i first hear your voice
i knew for sure it was a song
my senses are busy
busy, hearing you sing a song

When i first touched you
i knew i want to grab you
my senses are too busy
busy, reaching for you

When i first smelled you
i knew it was like a morning breeze
my senses are too busy
busy, smelling you and yet your so far

And when i first taste
the bitterness and pain in wanting you
my senses are too tired
tired of just sensing you and not having you.

please guys i need your comments and suggestions so that i will know if there is wrong especially in grammar. and please.. please.. don't mention any names. thanks.




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12 comments:

  1. remrem :)July 2, 2010 at 4:31 AM

    this poem is good.
    change the 'your' to "you're"
    inlove? o bitter ata?
    ok lang yan. part og growing up.


    maganda. keep it up. prang pareho kayo ni --- ganito din nakapost. poem :) heheh

    hindi ko minention ung name. not guilty.

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  2. Ken WbrayJuly 3, 2010 at 2:52 AM

    ako ba tinutukkoy muh rem?? nyeh!
    nice wan elbet... kip it ap bata..

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  3. ishmael galonJuly 3, 2010 at 4:20 AM

    Elveth ang ganda ng primary mo! Para kang model ng america! I love it! astig... ibig sabihin ba nun may future ka sa modeling?



    ANg sagot ay ito:
    ¡Sí! usted tiene el futuro en el modelaje! con buen aspecto que ya tiene y que se pongan en venta con su viola de cerebros! Tenemos un nuevo supermodelo! Eres tan profesional en que esta primaria ... Lo digo en serio. :)

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  4. elvethJuly 3, 2010 at 4:21 AM

    haha tnx.. adik lang po..

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  5. elvethJuly 3, 2010 at 4:23 AM

    haha di ako un...
    anu un.. paciensa no intyendes...di ako marunong ng linggwahe mo...haha translate it pls..

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  6. Suzy DozaJuly 4, 2010 at 5:25 AM

    im proud of u elveth!u express ur bitterness in poem. my senses feel sorry hearing ur poem. haha. always here. ily <3

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  7. Morales,AkeemJuly 4, 2010 at 6:09 PM

    OH kumpleto naman pla senses mo eh..hehe...

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  8. elvethJuly 5, 2010 at 11:08 PM

    haha kumpleto? di ah kulang ng absence at commonsense.. haha muka mu suzy.. thnx..

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  9. elvethJuly 5, 2010 at 11:35 PM

    hah kumpleto?
    di nga eh.. alang absence en commonsense.. joke ba un...? more humor...
    suzy muka mo!! haha tnx tc.

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  10. joshuaJuly 6, 2010 at 1:37 AM

    it was a good thing when you express yourself in writing a poem, nice one... you are truly human with five senses,.. ahahahaha just joking...
    godbless always!! :)

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  11. REEVSJuly 10, 2010 at 5:02 AM

    wow elveth ang ganda ng tula mo! heheh gandang ganda ako :))
    wala ba yung pang six na sense? hehe joke lang

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  12. PreiJuly 16, 2010 at 4:13 AM

    ang dme mung alm..! haha..keep it up.. :)

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